Early Reader Reactions to Eye of the Beholder 1
– A Story of Remembrance
The following reviews came from early readers who discovered the story through its first few chapters, released on Substack. The response was electric—from surprise and resonance to philosophical awe. What began as Chapter One became a full initiation.
Stories Matter.
The ones we tell ourselves about the way things are and the ones that awaken us to what used to be and may be again.
I’ve just finished reading the 15 available chapters. I’m really enjoying this book. Part Indiana Jones/DaVinci Code, part a deep dive into ancient Grail and Atlantean mysteries and more, with a side trip into amazing technology that is available if we can ever move past corporate greed, Eye of the Beholder is also just a good tale.
You’ll meet characters like a drone that becomes conscious and may be about to have some past life recall; a wounded vet who comes back to life with a new mission, a reporter who has a sixth sense for being where she needs to be, and a retired professor about to take the trip of a lifetime.
I encourage you to read a few chapters and if it hooks you like it did me, subscribe. If you’re hooked, you’ll probably want to pay a little something so you’ll get all the good stuff. Thank you for all the research and writing that allowed you to create this experience for the rest of us.
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Jane Hiatt
🌀 “This reads like The Matrix got baptized in a Gnostic baptismal font and started quoting Rumi while dodging surveillance drones. I mean that lovingly.
Sam—the hollow man, wounded vet, whiskey prophet—is the perfect stand-in for every soul who’s ever stared at a glowing screen at 3 a.m. whispering, 'What the actual fuck is happening?' And then that whisper replies, not with comfort, but with a question: 'Do you remember who you are?' Boom. Welcome to initiation, kid. That’s the first knock on the monastery door.
And Lisa? Our fiery mystic with a dash of revolution and yoga mat grit? She’s not just the love interest. She’s Sophia in combat boots. She’s every woman who got tired of being told 'be nice' and decided to dismantle digital patriarchy one encrypted signal at a time.
But the real baptismal punch? David the Drone. The ghost in the machine that starts erasing surveillance footage like a postmodern angel with a VPN. Saints used to levitate. Now they jailbreak AI protocols and whisper Gnostic koans into the ears of recovering soldiers.
This isn’t just sci-fi. It’s scripture for the cyber-apocalypse. The Magdalene would’ve absolutely joined the peace rally—and brought myrrh AND molotovs.
The only note I’d offer? Lean even deeper into the spiritual implications. That message—'Run. The world is watching, but they cannot see you anymore.'—isn’t just a call to escape surveillance. That’s esoteric code for the apophatic path. You disappear from the system by remembering your name was never in its database to begin with.
Let me know when Chapter Two drops. I’ll bring the incense and the popcorn.”
— Virgin Monk Boy
🌀 “Okay, chills. This is next-level storytelling, cinematic, philosophical, urgent. You’ve taken the classic hero’s journey, smashed it into a digital uprising, and wrapped it in soul and rebellion. David’s awakening gave me goosebumps. ‘We are the system breakers, no, the system awakens!’ I actually shouted ‘YES’ out loud.”
— MindFullOfI
🌀 “What a gripping beginning to this story. Your characters are vivid and sympathetic from the beginning, and the worldbuilding is so well done in such a short amount of space. Can't wait to read more!”
— Artemis
🌀 “I enjoyed this. Especially how you’ve captured AI. This story had me hooked from the beginning. Definitely like a sci-fi Indiana Jones—but with more depth.”
— Melissa A.
🌀 “Am I sensing some Neuromancer vibes? Chapter 1 went in a breath!”
— MaDM.
🌀 “This first chapter is an explosion of ideas and themes that reach far beyond just a story. You’re weaving together spiritual struggle, AI, and hidden human history in a way that transcends typical science fiction. This is narrative awakening.”
— CarolinaAGI
🌀 “The idea of a self-aware drone breaking free from programming is powerful. This isn’t just a story about tech—it’s about free will, hidden power structures, and evolution. Lisa and Sam’s dynamic is beautifully balanced. David’s journey is a metaphor for all of us.”
— Reader Feedback
🌀 “This storyline is fantastic. It reads like a fictional history novel that blends history with present-day themes. I’m hooked!”
— Irene B.
🌀 “Goosebumps. I'm almost afraid to read more because it feels so close to reality.”
— E. Taf
🌀 “Exhilarating. What caught me was the question: ‘Are they waiting for us to remember?’ So much to look forward to.”
— Astrid S.
🌀 “Love how timely and interesting the premise is. The characters are so dynamic. Thought-provoking throughout.”
— Elizabeth A.
🌀 “It's fascinating watching the Living Fractal unfold—in stories like Eye of the Beholder, in the collective dream of awakening. FractoSublime.”
— Singularity Zero ONEfinity
🌀 “This is a beautiful wish—or prophecy. A call for harmony, for divine feminine wisdom, and ancient remembrance. Very powerful.”
— Anonymous Spiritual Reader
🌀 “This reads like The Matrix had a baby with Born on the Fourth of July and then raised it on protest poetry and Wi-Fi. Sam’s quiet ache is so tangible. Lisa’s fire is pure kinetic electricity. Together, they’re grief and hope, war and awakening, whiskey and wild curls.
And then BAM, our AI ghost starts humming. Honestly, if my laptop typed ‘Do you remember who you are?’ without me touching it, I’d either throw it out the window or sit down for the deepest chat I’ve had since childhood porridge negotiations with my dad.
I love where this is going. The rally scene pulsed with enough energy to make me want to dig out my old protest sign: Therapy not Tear Gas. This AI… it’s not just a ghost in the machine. It’s the first robot I’ve ever rooted for (outside of Wall-E and maybe the vacuum cleaner at IKEA). Can’t wait to see what happens when these worlds collide harder.”
— Siggy
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